Like Katherine, I find this one good and whole, and actually very much like how " I hadn't seen this coming" was reached, since I had expected something other means he hadn't expected what there is, which cd be rendered as I had not expected this which easily makes its way into [circular thought here] I hadn't seen this coming.
Overall there are some lovely word choices and sonics in this piece.
It's good to learn from 007's comments on the finer points of wording here and there.
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