I still find this one comic and can't completely explain why. No offense to the DG, but I can't figure why it was one of his/her picks. As I said before, the bar was supposed to be raised this time around -- wasn't it? (Maybe better sonnets are coming?) What about the penultimate line? "He waits his chance to sneak past the alarm" is iambic pentameter all by itself, so why are there extra syllables before it? This is just not a good, polished sonnet for me. Very disappointed.
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