I like this one. The weakest part, I would say, are the clichés about the bats and the beans. But even a cliché can have its uses, since this establishes an ordinary, colloquial voice (most people use clichés constantly in their speech). The veins as road maps and "crepey" skin I have heard before (although at least here it is "railway maps"). The fear of catheters and the June that feels like December seem more original to me. I particularly like the indirectness of speaking of a cat as "what sits on you and purrs." I know several cat lovers who fear being labeled a "cat lady" because of the term's associations with extreme cases of people who have large numbers of cats that they cannot look after properly. The question of "how many is too many?" weighs on them.
Susan
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