I'm still thinking about names here. Why would the N. need to mention the name Ann -- one syllable, "defined and certain" -- at all? (The word "iamb" is a trochee by itself, of course, but its meaning is the opposite.) Perhaps the N's name is an iamb -- Lynette, Renee, Jenelle, whatever. Same question: Is it a flaw in the poem that the N's name isn't mentioned? Would that make things clearer?
I, too, have just a teensy problem with the too-close rhyme of "missed" and "dismissed" in the octave, as someone mentioned early on. Only teensy....
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