Once again, our DG picks an interesting subject and approach - but this one also features a strong poem - one of my favorites. Nits:
- I found the opening "still before/the eyes of ultrasound" confusing.
"just" as the ending of L7 bothers me. Possibly:
- the second heart, my late and weaker thrust,
as just an echo, bouncing off of yours.
I assume the narrator's name is an iamb ending on a long vowel. "Uma", as Julie suggested, or equivalent.
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