I'd like to see it end with a question mark. That's all I've got.
Except . . . L8 seems a bit flat, perhaps, and might be used to let us know somehow that "you" are seeing the beauty that the following lines ask about. Simply noting that the night has grown cold, a mundane complaint, doesn't really hint at the passenger's contented state contemplating the moon and the sky and the water, etc. L8 is quite good enough not to derail the sonnet, mind you, but I wish for a bit more.
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