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Unread 10-02-2014, 02:02 AM
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Oh, I love ‘integument’ in the stanza describing the “high register” Ruggiero, winged horse, sea monster –it’s a perfect fit, and even funny, with the continuation of ‘likewise’ referencing the mastiff… Something goes technically skewy for me in S1L4, and also S2L3 – should there be a dash or comma at the end of the line? But I DO love that ‘just’ right there at the end of S2L6. Clever stuff here.
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