As a poem, this is pleasurable and imaginative. As a translation, it makes me question some of the translator's choices. For instance, I am not quite sure why "word" pupates to "myth" or how a moth could eat a myth in the same concrete way it could eat a word on a page. The metaphor has been netted only to then escape. Also, I do not associate myths with bards' songs, though this is less of a problem. I am not keen on "pilfering guest" as the more literal "thiefguest" (one word!) seems better, but not sonically or alliteratively, I'll admit.
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