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Unread 03-04-2015, 03:55 PM
Graham King Graham King is offline
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Originally Posted by Matt Q View Post
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I don't think L8 works. It's out of keeping with the rest of the poem, I'm working on a fix. I'm a little unhappy/unsure regarding the tense of 'swore', I think it should be historic present, but maybe it does it work as past (I try to convince myself).
All looks fine to me, Matt, just as it is. And a novel take on the theme!
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