I respectfully disagree with the DG's assessment of the rhyme scheme. The sestet is EFEFEF, so it is a modified Petrarchan sonnet, which fits the warped love theme. Though I agree that the content is creepy, I find the meter unpleasantly ragged and the enjambments often awkward. The title is also slightly off. Donne's poem is "A Valediction: Forbidding Mourning," which makes sense. I don't see how one can have a valediction against mourning. So, on the whole, I am not wild about this one.
Susan
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