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Unread 11-10-2015, 09:59 PM
Skip Dewahl Skip Dewahl is offline
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Stays within the meter quite faithfully, not too much embellishment to a song which keeps it simple, so, good job, but the lines "Now while there’s merriment, let’s stay," and "How pale are you!" need reworking. Again, nicely done.
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