The first line "Tell me where, in what foreign place" is off-meter, which as scanned in the French goes something like TAH tuh TAH TAH, tuh TAH tuh TAH, and there are a few more, but not enough to detract from from the overall skill seen here, but I'm afraid "Much more than a mere human man-trap", is a bit much for "Qui beauté eut trop plus qu’humaine?", likewise "Saintly Heloise," and a few more, but I for one like the refrain
"But where does snow go when it’s gone?" Wish I'd've thought of it when I did my translation. Much work went into the whole and ample praise is due, however.
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