They're both well done, but the first song needs a higher diction to match the of tone of the elegant courtly complaint, especially in contrast to the buffoonery of the second piece.
So, for instance, I would get rid of "I fell in the spell."
I would say "who is [rather than who's] your lover"
And in the last line – "what would you do to those whom you despise?" (There's an extra syllable there, but I think it could be squeezed into the trill.)
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