[Brian Allgar]

Martin, thanks for keeping the ball in the air!

I had originally considered “entombed”, but rejected it as lacking a syllable. On reflection, though, I think you’re right. The initial syllable is required, but the second and third syllables of “enfouie” can be combined into a single note without affecting the melody.

I’ve made another attempt at lines 3 and 4 – those blasted T’s! Unfortunately, it loses some of the meaning (both “face” and “smile” disappear), and is not entirely yuck-free.

And for the last line, I’m wondering about You are my reality, although it leaves out the questioning note of the original.

Bright as the day,
Entombed in the night,
Tell love to stay,
To show me still your light – *
You are my reality

Not very good, but perhaps no worse than the non-acrostic version. (Like you, I can’t resist a spot of verbal puzzle-solving.)

Mary’s quite right, though; it’s far easier to use tight rhyme-schemes for humorous verse.

* Or: To keep you in my sight ???

[Now get back to the day-job, Allgar!]