Oh no, I don't think so. I cant think of what else could be done in that line. Mine is a goodish poem but it doesn't really fit the rubric unless you are prepared to stretch a point. 'Tons and tons' has to be two 'tons'.
Charlie's is fun but has the same problem. Humph!
But I expect Bazza and his countlss aliases is confecting something.
Last edited by John Whitworth; 02-08-2016 at 02:57 PM.
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