Thanks George,
That seems to make the last foot an iamb rather than an anapaest.
And he WOKE | in inTENS | ive CARE
or even
He WOKE UP | in in TENS| ive CARE
I don't know if it works with an iamb on the end. That said, I've been saying this line out loud so many times I don't really trust my ear any more.
Maybe I just need to try for a different end rhyme / refrain, and resign myself to a fair bit of rapid rewriting.
Thanks again,
-Matt
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