Erik, I'm afraid that 'Gloucester' isn't even a slant rhyme with 'cure'. It's pronounced 'Gloster', to rhyme with 'foster' or 'roster'.
'Banner-waving' needs a hyphen.
'Argot' is pronounce 'ARgo', and doesn't rhyme with 'what'.
And you've used both 'town' and 'crown' twice as end-rhymes.
Apart from that, I'm having difficulty working out the meaning in several places ...
Sorry to be so nitty.
Last edited by Brian Allgar; 06-30-2016 at 06:26 AM.
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