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A very finely crafted sonnet. I was a very tiny bit disappointed by the rhymes in the second quatrain, only in that the assonance of the 4 rhymes is so similar.

The first two feet of line 10 are indeed a mouthful. Also, there may be some (not I!) who would misread line 12, and attribute the soused and boring to the Peter Pan statue. I also think there must be a better adjective than "good" for the all-important last line.

In all, an interesting and enjoyable vignette.

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