This one is a pleasure to read and resonates nicely with both Peter Pan, of course, and Barrie's own life. I too wondered if "good" weren't a little flat at the end (and thought of suggesting "appeals," which would sacrifice the alliterative g sounds...). I understand what some mean about the effective falling tone. Is it a small logical flaw that the statue should seem to be aware of what's happening some distance away at the castle? If so, I suppose it's a smaller leap than his being sentient at all...
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