Actually, it's the first part of that line--"discard? Repurpose?"--rather than the ending--"(Coasters, trivets, raft?)" that troubles me a bit. You can't "redeem" (previous line) anything when you "discard" it.
Personally, I'd like to see that line be a more Martha Stewart-like list of DIY projects, ending with the facetious "Raft?":
(A message center, coasters, trivets? Raft?)
or perhaps
(Upcycled corkboard, coasters, trivets? Raft?)
"corkboard" is, of course, redundant, but Martha's forever saying "upcycled".
[Edited to say: After thinking it over, I don't think either of my suggestions is better than the original. But I still have minor qualms about "discard? Repurpose?"]
Regardless, I like this sonnet a lot.
Last edited by Julie Steiner; 10-22-2016 at 11:18 AM.
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