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Unread 10-23-2016, 01:26 AM
Simon Hunt Simon Hunt is offline
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Memorable and well-turned. However, the meter seems at times to lurch a bit for me rather than to swing. Likewise, some of the slant rhymes are really slant. Too slant?
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