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Unread 10-23-2016, 09:31 AM
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A fine and interesting effort. The vague reference to N’s “craft” is a bit disconcerting—a little more context might make the metaphor stronger. I wonder about the punctuation at the end; perhaps this would be smoother:

Unwittingly he reinforced the vessel:
I've learned to steer the hull in which I nestle.
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