I'm with Robin on this one. The poem is nice and neat, skillfully crafted, but I don't see it as something a real person would be thinking and saying after a breakup. I see it more as something a person wanting to write a sonnet about a breakup would say/think. There's no ache, no passion, no urgency. It's clever, and that's it. Also, I'm questioning whether a sonnet that was previously workshopped on Eratosphere, something several people are already familiar with and may have even helped create, should be in a supposedly anonymous contest.
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