First, thanks to aka Orwn Acra (sp?) for comparing said parodied sonnet of the Bard's with this pretty number.
After that, Shakespeare proved his love far beyond a summer's day, whereas this sonneteer seems content to merely liken the season invoked and former lover.
Other than that, I could wish it a tad more generous in differing with Shakespeare's but that seems rather peevish.
L7 introduces what follows, yet seems to stand alone as it cuts in after the flow of the previous lines.
If it's not rude, I beg to differ with the "impeccable craftsmanship" assessment, the flow rather choppy, which is typical of an amateur, the Bard being no exception.
Elsewise, this is a clever piece of work and I rather enjoyed its parody of sorts.
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