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Old 09-11-2018, 02:29 PM
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Jan,
this is very well done--it creates a convincing voice.

I wonder about the word "hale" in L3; you appear to be using it as a verb, which however is not only archaic but means to drag or pull up (I guess like "haul"). The examples that I can find online are all transitive, so I am not sure if your usage here is correct, but this could just be my ignorance.

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Martin
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