You're welcome, Sarah-Jane :-)
Oh good; I'm happy to have helped, particularly re. 'silken drawers' as I did think about that for a little longer before returning to the laptop to post my suggestions for your excellent poems.
Where you are now is looking great. The line 'of underwear and immaterial culture' feels long, maybe? I think I might be lingering too long through the syllables, though. It might be worth checking the punctuation, but I think you might be using it differently from me, e.g. using the space at the end of a line.
And thank you very much for your gift for me and W.-B.! I've been a bit beaten up at work recently, so it's pleasant to be heralded 'Felicitous', lol. I like the movement in the foreground, while the backdrop scene is beautiful, not unlike Winchcombe's Sudeley Castle yet with even more trees. And I still love your 'deer lady'.
It's been hot again here today; hope you're as comfortable as possible in your hammock!
Best wishes,
Fliss & W.-B. :>x
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