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It's a dream that wakes and finds life can be a dream, right? (Can we dream a dream about dreaming?) Well, maybe that's not exactly what you're trying to say, but then again, dreams are always open to interpretation — ha!
Interesting use of "rumples" as an adjective. My image is that you've kicked the sheets and blankets off the bed and they are lying on the floor — though I'm pretty sure you have a different image. I just like the image of all the sheets and blankets completely kicked off the bed as if the dream itself had done it. I imagine the N sitting up, looking up. I'm very children's story-minded so this has echoes of Where the Wild Things Are by Maurice Sendak when Max, who has beed bad and acting wild, has been sent to bed without any dinner and falls asleep. He dreams his room becomes a wild jungle and a boat (I have no idea how a boat appears out of nowhere in a jungle) appears that takes him far away across the sea to an island where the wild things are waiting for him.
Not sure how one can "ramble dimly" but I still like it for its odd connotations.
S3L2: I'm not sure you need an ellipsis. Perhaps a colon to compliment the colon in S1L1?
"Threadless sheets" of light is such a textured image!
I could write about dreams every day — except for the fact that the real ones escape me every time I try to remember them. They are much too quick on their feet. They (dreams) are fey-like, to steal a word from Jan's riveting "Street Vendors" quatrain. In fact that is all they are: fey. "Dreamscape" is the picture in the dictionary next to the word "fey"
I enjoy your way of seeing things. Sharing one's dreams can be a bit like showing home movies to the neighbors, but yours are the absorbing kind that cause me to feel dream-like. To feel fey. (There's that word again.)
To wake from sleep and remember its dreams is the ultimate poem. But the dream trope also suffers from tread-wear. I think you manage to keep your head above water with this one. But I think, too, that there is room here to improve its buoyancy. I hope to come back when I have more time to think on it. Dream on : )
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