I love this, David: an alien abduction story I can believe. My only suggestion, other than “sci-fi,” is a comma after “above.” In the controversial final couplet, btw, my understanding of the grammar is that “whose” refers to “saints” and “theirs” to the creatures. I think that works, but it tends to discourage Joe’s suggestion: I don’t suppose you’d hope the saints are moved by love.
P.S. Like Jim, I paused a moment to fix the double image from “TV set,” but it didn’t take long enough to bug me.
Last edited by Carl Copeland; 12-01-2023 at 03:38 AM.
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