[Andrew Frisardi]

One of the reasons that I love this is that the playfulness offsets the didacticism, while the insights give the playfulness bite. The rhyming free verse* keeps things from getting predictable, and as I read I look forward to the next surprise, even as the content is getting me to think. So nicely done, Julie.

[*Editing back in to add: I'd agree with Carl that this is basically iambic, and not really free verse. I'd call it iambic with some substitutions and lots of variation in line lengths. That's what gives it such rapid movement, a very good vehicle for its wittiness.]

My favorite lines at present are “Nothing fosters brotherhood / like fear of otherhood.” Frigging brilliant.

One minor distraction, I noticed last time and this time too, but forgot to mention: do you need the modifier “pretty” in the last line? To me those lines would have more bite and decisiveness without it.

I smiled at your title option “Oh, Evolve!” It reminded me of a story a friend of mine told me. She’d been at a bar, where a guy kept hitting on her obnoxiously. Finally, she looked him straight in the eyes and delivered the imperative: “Evolve.” He might not have taken her advice, but he did leave her alone after that.