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Unread 12-04-2023, 02:22 AM
Mary McLean Mary McLean is offline
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Julie,
These are fab. I prefer evolution as a title. We may not have improved in essence but the details have changed. That's still evolution.
My only minor suggestion would be to end on strong couplets more often. So I would cut the epicaricacy couplet to leave just one in #2, and in #4 I would move the middle stanza to the end. You could even move the epicaricacy couplet to the end of #3, though I don't think that is necessarily an improvement.
Keep 'em coming!
Mary
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