Hi Alexandra. A few random thoughts on this ...
"in rumples" is an interesting phrase that I haven't come across before. I wonder whether there might be a better word than "rumples" - somewhere.
"subtly" presents itself to me - here - as trisyallbic too, although my usage is usually just the two, I think.
It seems to me a full-blown Romantic poem - quite a Visitation. The effect it had on you comes through clearly in the poem - right down to that closing question mark! You've given your inner Romantic free rein here - or possibly reign.
Cheers
David
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