Revision posted.
Thank you, friends, for expressing what you like in this one and for helping me identify some spots to tinker. I'm glad the nonce-form and sounds seem to be working to some degree, and I wonder if the small changes above constitute any improvement. I note your hesitation about the "druthers" line (2 of you, anyway), but I'm still tickled enough by it to keep it for now.
Thanks again, Susan, Andrew, and Alexandra.
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