Sorry to be late to comment, but I'm sending good vibes toward your submitted application.
Your government entity comment confused me, too. I would hesitate to invoke the NSA, FBI, or CIA in a poem. But the Forest Service?
Between S2LL4&5, I thought it might be helpful to mention something like "not our innocent backfires," or perhaps to italicize "our" in L5. I was slow to figure out what was happening there.
I loved the "bland punching-bag faces."
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