Roger, thanks for the suggestion. I'll keep it for revision.
Jim, your inclination in reading is what I intended but I can accept if it fails at doing it. I've wondered far too many times why someone would become defensive when it's pointed out that a poem fails. I don't have to accept it either immediately but I learn more by failure than by praise. This one is a little out of my usual and I think I may not be very good with poems that have a wry message. But I'll continue to think about it. Thanks.
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