Alexandra thank you for spending time on this
The breaks are relatively arbitrary I ran them up the flagpole with nary a salute.
You (and many others) and I will tend to disagree on the need to adhere to grammatical rules. In formal poetry the rules are made to be broken. But also my housekeeping tends to be slack when the pen is running away.
I have changed ‘seductive malevolence’ I could not find enough instance to render it cliche your questioning was enough for me to reconsider.
The missing syllable? The schwa in cure (cue-ah) maybe our pronunciation differs.
Thank you I hope you like the expanded edit.
Thanks Nemo there is something particularly disturbing in the fact of particulates in odour but I agree it is out of place.
I have reverted to the chunk.
Greetings Anirudh and welcome to the ‘sphere. I hope the edit addresses most of your concerns.
Jan
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