Thread: Losing the plot
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Unread 01-10-2024, 10:29 AM
Max Goodman Max Goodman is offline
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I like this, Joe.

The last stanza feels different than the rest, more evocative, less prosey/prosaic. The rest might be pushed in that direction with more concision. (Half deaf, unsighted, and forgetful,/I struggle to engage.//My hearing aid hisses...)

In another way, too, the last stanza doesn't feel to me like it fits the rest of the poem: Despite its unhelpful second line, the last stanza is about knowing what is going on. Maybe a turn could make it clearer that the poem recognizes this change in approach.

The glasses make clear--and much of the rest implies--that the speaker is not "unsighted."

FWIW.
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