I’m happy to have this in met. It’s anisometric (just learned the word), but we don’t have an anisomet forum, and it’s iambic from start to finish (allowing for some headlessness).
The jokes talking among themselves is probably my favorite bit, but I wonder about “worry after.” Is that idiomatic in the UK, or am I mistaking your meaning?
A mark of punctuation is missing after “head.”
We can’t tell whether “nearer now” refers to the leavings or the shadow, but it may not matter.
Actually, I think my favorite line is a very plain one: “I wonder what it brings.” For me, this captures the mood of the whole poem: a calm, resigned curiosity about the process of aging. If only we could all age as philosophically as this narrator.
Last edited by Carl Copeland; 01-10-2024 at 12:27 PM.
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