Hi Jim,
I appreciate that we all have our own (valid) opinions here - but I have to say that I really like this! As someone who only writes in rhyme, it's probably bound to appeal to me more than poets who write free verse, to be fair.
I can't think which poet's work it reminds me of, specifically, but it reads like something out of an old anthology from yestercentury. (Drat, I thought I'd invented a new word there, but apparently not.)
I've read it several times, looking hard to find something you might change or improve, but no - I like it just the way it is. You've got some nice phrases and alliteration, and the title fits. I use "candle power" myself, when speaking of a place I go to for meetings occasionally, where the lighting is absolutely appalling!
This is a keeper, as far as I'm concerned.
Jayne
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