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Unread 01-18-2024, 12:43 PM
David Callin David Callin is offline
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Great rhyming, Julie - I particularly like "come and" and "summoned". And you handle the metre really well too, although I wonder whether "Despite" would be better than "Ignoring" at the start of S3.

And would "something" be better in L1?

Anyway, I like it. Nice to see Lobelia Sackville-Baggins getting a rare run out.

Cheers

David
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