Hi Jan,
I seem to remember this one from a while back, though perhaps you've changed it somewhat (or perhaps I'm hallucinating). Anyway, I really like it. The chaotic domestic scene brought a Dylan song to my mind too: "On The Road Again", the one with all this stuff going on:
Well, I wake up in the morning,
there's frogs in my socks
Your mama, she's hidin'
inside the icebox
Your daddy comes in, wearin'
a Napoleon Bonaparte mask
though the tone of your poem is much darker than Bob's playful surrealism.
I love the accumulation of details and the way the stanzas lengthen by one line each time, like a runaway train. With that in mind, I wonder if you need the full-stop before the last line of S2? Might it be better as
and her Dad’s dead drunk
and the drought goes on
and the trees are chasing the dog.
Mark
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