Thank you, Jayne. I’m so glad you enjoyed it.
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Originally Posted by Jayne Osborn
I did wonder about the coupling of "berth" and "re-birth", but not enough to trouble me...
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I guess you’re uneasy about the identity rhyme. I know that some consider it a poor rhyme (though it’s also called “rich”!), but it’s not something I’m sensitive to as long as the words are different. For me, I think the distance between the rhyming words helps too. Your alternative could work, except that I’d rather not start varying the meter in the final leg of the journey.