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Originally Posted by John Riley
Nick, I try very hard to not react negatively to a comment but I have to say that I've long ago realized that when someone says the word "prose" in a comment it tells me that the commenter has a cripplingly narrow concept of what poetry is.
If you take a look at your revision you can see what I mean. It's a teachable moment. You've managed to take out all the rhythm and turned it into a discourse as flat as the most boring professor. Why is that not prose-like? Because the regularity of the lines looks more like a conventional poem on the page?
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With my revision I wasn't intending it to be less prose-like, it was just a possibility you could play around with. It's really the same poem, just a different shape that emphasizes different parts of the writing.
I wasn't trying to imply that my revision was an improvement, it's just an idea of something you could do if you want to mess around with the form of your poems.