Matt,
Is it about an adult's circumcision? Ouch.
It rides the sonnet, versus the sonnet rising above its content. I admire this.
The first strophe, a good depiction of a nightmare, a dexterous 'untidy' picture - the taste of a puzzle, as dreams tend to be. You’re good at these..
The closing hits harder than morning light usurps the space of an alcove. How strange to say, “Beautiful, Matt,” to such lonely feeling that comes through.
Sigh..
~mignon
Last edited by mignon ledgard; 03-01-2024 at 02:10 AM.
Reason: An attempt at clarity
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