Tony, it's going fine for me until the last line. I give "fire" one syllable, but I am aware that some people give it two, so I roll with it. But the meter of the last line is so jumbled and off-putting that I can't tell whether the speaker is accepting the listed items or scorning them. I end up not with a sense of life's ambiguity, but a "Huh?" It's not a great note to end on.
Susan
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