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Unread 04-08-2024, 08:42 AM
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Revision posted (but now, 6 hours later, is up for another revision.)

John, Cameron: the increased length I hope affords me some leeway : )

Mignon, I'm grateful that you stayed with this.

[Remainder of the comment edited out as I revise my revision]

Carl, Thanks for wading in and tactfully telling me without words that the revision was too prosaic and covered in cliche : ) which it was. But I have yet another way to say it that I'm thinking about.

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