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Originally Posted by Alexandra Baez
As to "dilapidated," I think it's ambiguous as to what extent of disrepair this word refers to, but I understand that it can carry a connotation of dire ruin. I'd meant to convey paint peeling and rust forming, nothing more. I do like having a five-syllable word here and could be happy with one that's less emphatic. I'll be thinking. Thanks for your input! [Update: "illusion-bearing" or even "illusionary" might touch paradoxically into the metaphysical underlayer of this poem, but might be too much of a leap, especially the latter.]
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I think you've lost alot by losing the word
dilapidated. As to Sam's POV that it is not the right word, I like the expansiveness of the meaning of the word
dilapidated. Age dilapidates people and things. I think it works.
However, if you're looking for another way to convey the state of the window, you could go with something that personifies it.
Something like, "your weary-eyed window frame"
just thinking...
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