I understood that was your intent, but it seems like such a random example except for the happenstance of the rhyme. Since your only audience for this poem will be your fellow poets, in particular the ones who write in meter and rhyme, I think most of your readers will see it as purely rhyme driven. Perhaps I'm alone in this, but for me it sticks out in a way that is particularly troublesome in a poem that purports to lay down the law about poetic form and craft.
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