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Originally Posted by Matt Q
I'm not hearing how "me" and "way" are slant rhymes. They have no consonant or vowel sounds in common. I guess you might argue that both don't end with consonant, but that's pretty thin, I think.
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It’s a little better than that, I think, because not only are [i] and [e] close to each other phonetically (close front and close mid front, respectively), the “ay” in “way” isn’t a pure vowel, but has a little “ee” sound at the end [eɪ]—at least the way I hear it. So for me it’s an acceptable, though not ideal, rhyme. Still, with your encouragement, I’m strongly considering reverting to “free.”
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Originally Posted by Matt Q
I wonder if "sick" in this context might be translated as "pine"? As in: "It’s nice to know that you don’t pine for me".
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Yes, that would work, but it’s a bit of a poetic cliché, isn’t it? I was trying for something a little more unusual and expressive of “sickness” or “pain” (the Russian words have the same root).
Thanks again, Matt!