Very nice ghazal, Carl! You bring us through the Biblical history of Babylon, and you continue through Alexander the Great (Sikandar), but Sodom and Gomorrah are in Israel. You might add a sher on the Crusades, the Balfour Declaration, and the Gulf War. How about using “Mosul and Fallujah” instead of “Sodom and Gomorrah?” In most of your shers, the qaafiyaa is “or(n) in(g),” so maybe that doesn’t work.
Last edited by Glenn Wright; 05-23-2024 at 01:49 AM.
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