Hi Susan,
I like the idea of committed monogamous love as limitation here, as an acceptance of finitude and the inevitability of death. I don't really know if I agree with it or not (or maybe I just don't want to!) but it's striking, and I like that I'm presented with it in this poem.
I'm wondering about the repetition of "it's all the rage". I makes me think that I'm supposed to read it differently the second time. So, first time, "it's fashionable", second time, "it's all the anger" -- but I can't get the latter to fit sense-wise. What's all the rage in this second sense? I don't think that you're saying that committed relationships are full of rage and that one should stay in a rage-filled relationship.
Ah, is it raging against the dying of the light? It's raging/fighting against death that leads to separation/ an aversion to commitment? I guess that fits with love being, "the beginning of our end". If so, an interesting reference, since in the Thomas' villanelle, the raging seemed to be presented as something heroic rather than a weakness.
"delights" of Tinder seems somewhat bland/abstract, and sonically not doing much. I wonder if there's an image/metaphor, or a more sonically pleasing or more slantwise way of conveying the delight/temptations/allure of Tinder here? Maybe something like "All of Tinder's tinsel can't assuage" could convey that what Tinder offers is shiny, gift-wrapped but lacking much substance? OK, maybe not a great example, but maybe something more in that direction?
"limitless choice" hit me the same way -- functional, but not much else going for it; and the deviation from the metre here seems to add to the flat, prosaic feel of the phrase, for me anyway.
best,
Matt
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